Writer Block

[WillPlay]

I tried to write a jar of flier or a sad grunge song type and its so cringe and its very similar to rotten apple could someone help me?

 

[Sara]

Try and change your environment and maybe take some sleep too. We can appear to have some discomfort and it used to affects whatever we are writing.

 

[WillPlay]

Try and change your environment and maybe take some sleep too. We can appear to have some discomfort and it used to affects whatever we are writing.

like i write overly edgy things like 'The sun has burned me of these sins' 'now i see it clear as rain'

 

[Jon]

like i write overly edgy things like 'The sun has burned me of these sins' 'now i see it clear as rain'

How does this sound?

"I’m just a blur in the hallway light
Fading slow, like you don’t see me right
The cracks in the floor, they’re growing wide
I’m standing still, but I’m sinking inside"

 

[WillPlay]

How does this sound?

"I’m just a blur in the hallway light
Fading slow, like you don’t see me right
The cracks in the floor, they’re growing wide
I’m standing still, but I’m sinking inside"

yeah I found out about our common problem this is not poetry this is music , u dont need the verses ending in the same letters as the last one. U need to emphasize the sound like idk let me do som real quick

I hope i find u well
Living in this casket
farewell my loove
hit me with this shovel

u see u need to emphasize ur sound (uh,oh,duh type sounds try to match them) and make them surprising